Last year we visited Argentina. Italian immigrants from Genoa built working class 'La Boca' alongside the old port in BA. The colourful 'Caminito' is a series of funky streets lined with brilliantly painted corrugated metal buildings.
Local artists display artwork and cafes spill out onto the pavements. Adding to the vibrant atmosphere, musicians and tango dancers entertain the crowds.
Walking down broad Avenue 9 de Julio I felt something drop from the overhead trees onto my head - bird shit! Suddenly, a woman sprang into action, whisking out tissues, wiping my jacket and pulling me in the direction of the curb where a friend appeared. The accomplice began throwing water about and attempted to wrestle my backpack from me. Meanwhile, the woman turned her attention to Brian who had mysteriously acquired suspicious brown stains on his jacket.
Whoa - warning bells began to ring - too much attention here for these Gringo's. Brian grabbed the woman by the hand as she attempted to remove his wallet which fell to the ground! Suddenly, our new best friends disappeared and were last seen jumping into a waiting car before speeding off. We were relieved to have escaped without harm and left embarrassed by the state of our smelly, stained clothing - Such are the hassles of a big city.
Tuesday, 21 June 2011
Friday, 17 June 2011
BURNOUT
Saturday morning - I had planned an early walk up over the hills of Taradale. My daily walk is an excellent time for me to think - throw around in my head ideas for my next writing assignment. However, not to be at the present time – it’s raining heavily outside with a southerly chill……….brrrr.
My last assignment involved the use of dialogue. We are given a brief one line story to continue with and there were to be three characters. It’s a very general outline but here is my story. I called it Burnout. Enjoy, have a read and post feedback.
Tyler will never forget the day his Mother stormed into the lounge. Her face said ‘keep away from me’.
Ann glanced at her watch.
Thank God, it’s 5 o’clock.
She walked to the bar and poured herself a glass of wine. The house smelt of furniture polish and vanilla potpourri.
“Hard day was it Mother?’ The brutal sarcasm in Tyler’s voice sprayed across the room.
Ann swallowed – anger filling her pores. Two tight lines appeared at the corner of her mouth. “Who gave you permission to drive my car?”
Tyler shrugged and stared at the carpet - looking everywhere – nowhere. His fingers picked at a scab on his left elbow.
“I’m waiting for an answer.”
“Me and the boys cruised down to the beach. It was pissing down earlier. What’s your problem anyway?”
Tyler folded his arms and stared out the window. A slight breeze crept around the side of the house. The grass moved – rippling like the muscles of an animal. He tugged at his hoodie - his lips disappearing in a line of petulance.
Impatiently, Ann moved her weight from one foot to the other. She inhaled. The wine began to take effect - the poison working it’s magic.
Fridays were Ann’s “escape the World day” – lunch with friends, a manicure - a drink at a bar to take the edge off a shitty week.
She reached for the bottle of Chardonnay. Lipstick bled into the tiny lines above her mouth.
“Tyler… take your feet off my coffee table”.
Ann sighed, her angry voice - grey and curling.
“Turn around when I’m speaking to you. My problem is the dent in the car.”
Her face knotted in fury. Resentment hung in the room like a dirty dishcloth. Tyler gnawed at his fingernails.
If he doesn’t turn around and face me, I’m going to slap him.
“I’ve often wondered what goes on inside that brain of yours and now I know – absolutely nothing.” Ann threw her hands in the air.
“Fucking hell, it’s just a car. Anyway, I never hit anything. You guys always blame me. Living here sucks.”
Ann twisted the stem of her wine glass in her fingers. Wearily, she walked towards her son. His long limbs splayed across the carpet. He reminded her of a stick insect.
Tyler - whatever happened to my sweet boy? The kid who picked pansies for his Mother as he walked home from school. Ann smiled, remembering the “I love you, Mum” notes she kept in her sock drawer. What happened? Why are you such an angry young man?
“The car has a dent on the right front panel. Your Father will be home shortly – he’ll be furious when he sees the damage. I don’t have the energy for your lies. Tell me what happened”.
Tyler uncurled his six-foot frame from the chair. Faded jeans hung low across his hips revealing underpants and flesh.
Ann leant forward. She smelt beer and stale cigarettes on his breath.
“My God, You’ve been drinking”. Her hand flew to her mouth.
“Man, that’s funny coming from you. We scored a couple of homebrews from some mates that’s all. Aren’t you the one always pissed and falling asleep in front of the television?
I told you, I never hit anything. There were like - Me, Ritchie and three chicks in the car, if you don’t believe me – ask them”.
The old lady’s lost it – going senile. I never pranged her car.
Tyler eyeballed his Mother. Accusation conspired with rage – until it ignited white-hot. He left the room without a word.
Ann refilled her glass.
Robert could walk in the door at any minute. I need time to think. Tyler is so ungrateful for all we’ve done for him and Robert - what a boring man he’s become. Work’s his only interest nowadays. He gives me absolutely no support.
Sometimes, I listen to my own thoughts and wonder – who is that speaking? Sadness sat at her feet.
In his bedroom, Tyler ranked the stereo to high. Walls and furniture vibrated - assaulted by sound. He lay on his bed flicking through the latest “Wheels” magazine.
God, I can hear it now – the old Man’s going to go on and on - blaming me as usual. You’d think I was the only kid who borrowed the car and did burnouts. I bloody know I never hit anything.
Smoking was against the house rules. “Fuck it” thought Tyler. He lit a cigarette and opened the window. The smell of rain drifted from the garden - summer was melting away.
Just like my life – going nowhere – shit fast!
The sky shone black and spiky with stars. The headlights of a car turned into the driveway.
Here it comes, another lecture from” Mr Lawyer Man”.
Robert drove into the carport. He reached for his briefcase. His head dropped and he closed his eyes. He let out a deep breath and stared down at his belly.
A “Petrol head” – that was Tyler with his dyed black hair, tattoo and tongue studs. A 17-year-old testosterone time bomb. He got his kicks out of mag wheels, spoilers and lowered suspension. His son was fast becoming an embarrassment.
I know what he gets up to on Saturday nights - cruising the streets, picking up girls, doughnuts in car parks, smoking rubber at traffic lights. Tyler’s an accident waiting to happen. He needs to learn the rules - life’s about getting a job, paying your way - not pissing off the Police force.
Robert glanced at his watch. Ann must have been home for a couple of hours.
Probably pissed.
A slight frown creased on his forehead.
I hope she’s not bolshie like last night.
A boring “Wordsmith” that’s what she called him when she staggered home from the Club. Thought it a clever – prissy phrase.
Yes, everything’s funny when she’s on her second bottle of wine. –until the tears start. The dreariness of middle age clung to Robert like a suit.
Well, my success and law practice pays the bills for those designer clothes and expensive lunches with her snobby friends.
He sighed, shoulders hunched. Robert opened the door and walked towards the house.
Friday night, thank goodness for the end of another week.
“Ann, I’m home. You in the lounge?”
“How was your day?”
Ann looked up. Her eyes red rimmed and watery.
She’s plastered. Probably been on the booze all day.
Pale and shaky, Ann stumbled. She corrected herself, pursed her lips and planted a slobbery kiss on Robert’s cheek.
When did her mouth shrink - become thin and mean?
They’d met at University where he was studying law. Robert followed the scene in his mind - Ann at the cafeteria with friends. Looking up from her lunch – blue eyes the colour of faded hydrangea flowers. Her hair wild and blonde. A slight smile, perfect teeth. Robert imagined himself swimming through a bowl of warm custard. He fell instantly in love. He wanted to kiss those lips.
Marriage - Happiness for life – what a joke. That got mislaid along the way and I can’t remember where to look for it. Robert shrugged. An overhead light flickered across his face.
God, I feel tired.
He poured himself a beer and turned to his wife. “Ann, I asked how was your day.”
“Great, until I got home. Tyler borrowed my car and pranged it. Lucky he didn’t kill himself or his friends. We need to do something about….” Tears began to tumble amongst words. Ann reached for the wine bottle.
A door opened. Rap music pulsated down the hall towards the lounge. Tyler appeared - his face a map of lined hostility. Clutching a can of Red Bull he slumped into his Father’s chair and glared.
“I told the old Lady, I never hit nothing in her car. How come you never believe me?” His eyes sought Ann’s unfocused gaze.
Ann shook her head. “Maybe we would if you weren’t such a liar.”
“That’s classic coming from you. Ask Ritchie if you don’t believe me. For fuck’s sake - get off my back will you.” He pushed his hands deep into his pockets.
Robert lent over to touch his son. “Let’s chill out here guys. We can sort this out.” Ann’s eyes rolled back in her head.
Here we go, Mr Boring again. Her thoughts interrupted by the shrill ring of a telephone.
“Hullo” Robert Brooks speaking.
“…………I see, yes.” His voice flickered – barely audible. “I’ll take care of it. Thank you for ringing.” Robert slowly placed the telephone down. Eyes – uncertain, injured.
Curiosity and indifference forced Tyler to ask. “ Dad……What?”
Robert turned to his wife.
“Ann, that was the Club President on the telephone. Apparently, you hit another member’s car last night. I said we would pay for any damage”.
Tyler focused on a cobweb above the fireplace. A ravenous silence squeezed itself into the room.
“That floral wallpaper makes me feel queasy”. Ann swallowed. Her mouth a cocktail of bitterness and bile. Tears broke into tributaries and rolled down her face.
My last assignment involved the use of dialogue. We are given a brief one line story to continue with and there were to be three characters. It’s a very general outline but here is my story. I called it Burnout. Enjoy, have a read and post feedback.
Tyler will never forget the day his Mother stormed into the lounge. Her face said ‘keep away from me’.
Ann glanced at her watch.
Thank God, it’s 5 o’clock.
She walked to the bar and poured herself a glass of wine. The house smelt of furniture polish and vanilla potpourri.
“Hard day was it Mother?’ The brutal sarcasm in Tyler’s voice sprayed across the room.
Ann swallowed – anger filling her pores. Two tight lines appeared at the corner of her mouth. “Who gave you permission to drive my car?”
Tyler shrugged and stared at the carpet - looking everywhere – nowhere. His fingers picked at a scab on his left elbow.
“I’m waiting for an answer.”
“Me and the boys cruised down to the beach. It was pissing down earlier. What’s your problem anyway?”
Tyler folded his arms and stared out the window. A slight breeze crept around the side of the house. The grass moved – rippling like the muscles of an animal. He tugged at his hoodie - his lips disappearing in a line of petulance.
Impatiently, Ann moved her weight from one foot to the other. She inhaled. The wine began to take effect - the poison working it’s magic.
Fridays were Ann’s “escape the World day” – lunch with friends, a manicure - a drink at a bar to take the edge off a shitty week.
She reached for the bottle of Chardonnay. Lipstick bled into the tiny lines above her mouth.
“Tyler… take your feet off my coffee table”.
Ann sighed, her angry voice - grey and curling.
“Turn around when I’m speaking to you. My problem is the dent in the car.”
Her face knotted in fury. Resentment hung in the room like a dirty dishcloth. Tyler gnawed at his fingernails.
If he doesn’t turn around and face me, I’m going to slap him.
“I’ve often wondered what goes on inside that brain of yours and now I know – absolutely nothing.” Ann threw her hands in the air.
“Fucking hell, it’s just a car. Anyway, I never hit anything. You guys always blame me. Living here sucks.”
Ann twisted the stem of her wine glass in her fingers. Wearily, she walked towards her son. His long limbs splayed across the carpet. He reminded her of a stick insect.
Tyler - whatever happened to my sweet boy? The kid who picked pansies for his Mother as he walked home from school. Ann smiled, remembering the “I love you, Mum” notes she kept in her sock drawer. What happened? Why are you such an angry young man?
“The car has a dent on the right front panel. Your Father will be home shortly – he’ll be furious when he sees the damage. I don’t have the energy for your lies. Tell me what happened”.
Tyler uncurled his six-foot frame from the chair. Faded jeans hung low across his hips revealing underpants and flesh.
Ann leant forward. She smelt beer and stale cigarettes on his breath.
“My God, You’ve been drinking”. Her hand flew to her mouth.
“Man, that’s funny coming from you. We scored a couple of homebrews from some mates that’s all. Aren’t you the one always pissed and falling asleep in front of the television?
I told you, I never hit anything. There were like - Me, Ritchie and three chicks in the car, if you don’t believe me – ask them”.
The old lady’s lost it – going senile. I never pranged her car.
Tyler eyeballed his Mother. Accusation conspired with rage – until it ignited white-hot. He left the room without a word.
Ann refilled her glass.
Robert could walk in the door at any minute. I need time to think. Tyler is so ungrateful for all we’ve done for him and Robert - what a boring man he’s become. Work’s his only interest nowadays. He gives me absolutely no support.
Sometimes, I listen to my own thoughts and wonder – who is that speaking? Sadness sat at her feet.
In his bedroom, Tyler ranked the stereo to high. Walls and furniture vibrated - assaulted by sound. He lay on his bed flicking through the latest “Wheels” magazine.
God, I can hear it now – the old Man’s going to go on and on - blaming me as usual. You’d think I was the only kid who borrowed the car and did burnouts. I bloody know I never hit anything.
Smoking was against the house rules. “Fuck it” thought Tyler. He lit a cigarette and opened the window. The smell of rain drifted from the garden - summer was melting away.
Just like my life – going nowhere – shit fast!
The sky shone black and spiky with stars. The headlights of a car turned into the driveway.
Here it comes, another lecture from” Mr Lawyer Man”.
Robert drove into the carport. He reached for his briefcase. His head dropped and he closed his eyes. He let out a deep breath and stared down at his belly.
A “Petrol head” – that was Tyler with his dyed black hair, tattoo and tongue studs. A 17-year-old testosterone time bomb. He got his kicks out of mag wheels, spoilers and lowered suspension. His son was fast becoming an embarrassment.
I know what he gets up to on Saturday nights - cruising the streets, picking up girls, doughnuts in car parks, smoking rubber at traffic lights. Tyler’s an accident waiting to happen. He needs to learn the rules - life’s about getting a job, paying your way - not pissing off the Police force.
Robert glanced at his watch. Ann must have been home for a couple of hours.
Probably pissed.
A slight frown creased on his forehead.
I hope she’s not bolshie like last night.
A boring “Wordsmith” that’s what she called him when she staggered home from the Club. Thought it a clever – prissy phrase.
Yes, everything’s funny when she’s on her second bottle of wine. –until the tears start. The dreariness of middle age clung to Robert like a suit.
Well, my success and law practice pays the bills for those designer clothes and expensive lunches with her snobby friends.
He sighed, shoulders hunched. Robert opened the door and walked towards the house.
Friday night, thank goodness for the end of another week.
“Ann, I’m home. You in the lounge?”
“How was your day?”
Ann looked up. Her eyes red rimmed and watery.
She’s plastered. Probably been on the booze all day.
Pale and shaky, Ann stumbled. She corrected herself, pursed her lips and planted a slobbery kiss on Robert’s cheek.
When did her mouth shrink - become thin and mean?
They’d met at University where he was studying law. Robert followed the scene in his mind - Ann at the cafeteria with friends. Looking up from her lunch – blue eyes the colour of faded hydrangea flowers. Her hair wild and blonde. A slight smile, perfect teeth. Robert imagined himself swimming through a bowl of warm custard. He fell instantly in love. He wanted to kiss those lips.
Marriage - Happiness for life – what a joke. That got mislaid along the way and I can’t remember where to look for it. Robert shrugged. An overhead light flickered across his face.
God, I feel tired.
He poured himself a beer and turned to his wife. “Ann, I asked how was your day.”
“Great, until I got home. Tyler borrowed my car and pranged it. Lucky he didn’t kill himself or his friends. We need to do something about….” Tears began to tumble amongst words. Ann reached for the wine bottle.
A door opened. Rap music pulsated down the hall towards the lounge. Tyler appeared - his face a map of lined hostility. Clutching a can of Red Bull he slumped into his Father’s chair and glared.
“I told the old Lady, I never hit nothing in her car. How come you never believe me?” His eyes sought Ann’s unfocused gaze.
Ann shook her head. “Maybe we would if you weren’t such a liar.”
“That’s classic coming from you. Ask Ritchie if you don’t believe me. For fuck’s sake - get off my back will you.” He pushed his hands deep into his pockets.
Robert lent over to touch his son. “Let’s chill out here guys. We can sort this out.” Ann’s eyes rolled back in her head.
Here we go, Mr Boring again. Her thoughts interrupted by the shrill ring of a telephone.
“Hullo” Robert Brooks speaking.
“…………I see, yes.” His voice flickered – barely audible. “I’ll take care of it. Thank you for ringing.” Robert slowly placed the telephone down. Eyes – uncertain, injured.
Curiosity and indifference forced Tyler to ask. “ Dad……What?”
Robert turned to his wife.
“Ann, that was the Club President on the telephone. Apparently, you hit another member’s car last night. I said we would pay for any damage”.
Tyler focused on a cobweb above the fireplace. A ravenous silence squeezed itself into the room.
“That floral wallpaper makes me feel queasy”. Ann swallowed. Her mouth a cocktail of bitterness and bile. Tears broke into tributaries and rolled down her face.
Monday, 13 June 2011
Excuses, excuses.......
Writing is a little bit like going on a diet –you make a commitment to lose 10kg or whatever. Sadly, you can get into really bad trouble if you tell all and sundry (like posting on a blog, Facebook or Twitter) and then you get sprung feeding your face in public – or maybe not finishing the blog you promised to write faithfully every week. Once you open your mouth and tell the world you are in for it – Well, when you don’t perform someone is going to send you an email saying “So, what’s happening?
On the other hand, you could tell no one about your obsession – get thin, write the story and then burst into the world brandishing your sure to be world famous manuscript. (Sounds a little like JK Rowling). Whatever plan you decide on, it is going to take time and commitment. Perhaps you will have to give up something like drinking, sleeping or watching television. I’ve noticed Husband and friends quickly become bored reading your drafts and listening to your plots. Writing is a solitary occupation.
Recently, I began a creative writing course which involves writing one or two assignments every couple of weeks and a huge amount of reading. That folks is my excuse for the lack of recent blogs on this blog. I spent 4 hours today dealing with the intricacies of dialogue. My main character is a young petrol head. Sounded an easy enough plot when I first put my mind to it –however, the dialogue has proved tricky to sound convincible. Mum’s a boozer and Dad a lawyer (well, they said write about what you know) – with a twist at the end.
As they say, a quick blog is a good blog. The photograph below has absolutely nothing to do with my writing. It is a snap taken last year by my husband Brian. I am riding north on the Pan American highway out of Lima, in Peru. The weather was hot and humid – we rode into a sandstorm that encroached to such an extent to almost obliterate the tarmac. The scenery was surreal and we felt as if we were cycling in the desert. The reason I am including it in my blog is because it won 3rd place in a photography competition – The title being “Highway to Hell”. Follow the following link if you are interested in the other submissions.
http://www.dpreview.com/challenges/Entry.aspx?ID=455023
On the other hand, you could tell no one about your obsession – get thin, write the story and then burst into the world brandishing your sure to be world famous manuscript. (Sounds a little like JK Rowling). Whatever plan you decide on, it is going to take time and commitment. Perhaps you will have to give up something like drinking, sleeping or watching television. I’ve noticed Husband and friends quickly become bored reading your drafts and listening to your plots. Writing is a solitary occupation.
Recently, I began a creative writing course which involves writing one or two assignments every couple of weeks and a huge amount of reading. That folks is my excuse for the lack of recent blogs on this blog. I spent 4 hours today dealing with the intricacies of dialogue. My main character is a young petrol head. Sounded an easy enough plot when I first put my mind to it –however, the dialogue has proved tricky to sound convincible. Mum’s a boozer and Dad a lawyer (well, they said write about what you know) – with a twist at the end.
As they say, a quick blog is a good blog. The photograph below has absolutely nothing to do with my writing. It is a snap taken last year by my husband Brian. I am riding north on the Pan American highway out of Lima, in Peru. The weather was hot and humid – we rode into a sandstorm that encroached to such an extent to almost obliterate the tarmac. The scenery was surreal and we felt as if we were cycling in the desert. The reason I am including it in my blog is because it won 3rd place in a photography competition – The title being “Highway to Hell”. Follow the following link if you are interested in the other submissions.
http://www.dpreview.com/challenges/Entry.aspx?ID=455023
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